Researched Argument Essay revision

Order Description

I will attach my essay with professor’s comments. Please correct my mistakes and add more paragraphs. You will see comments where to add paragraphs. I will also upload
the same essay without comments, so it will be easier to correct and add information there. Thank you very much. If you don’t understand the task, write a message to
me.

Instructions:

Your final draft of your Researched Argument should be a careful revision of your earlier draft. Your final draft should reflect your best effort on this assignment.
You have thought about and written about your ideas in multiple assignments.

Your final draft should be the culmination of all your previous work and include substantial revision. Your revision should be more than just editing of comments.
Revision may include ADDING, DELETING or REORDERING entire paragraphs, adding STRONGER EVIDENCE, or including a visual argument. The final draft should show
significant changes and/or improvements to the first graded draft.

Assignments which do not meet the minimum requirements may be returned without being graded. Plagiarism or improper/lack of citation of source material may result in
failure of the assignment. Be sure to include the heading with your name, the title of the assignment and label it Final Draft.

In this assignment you must demonstrate that you have implemented a research plan; used a rhetorically effective method of organization; formulated, developed and
supported a thesis using sound evidence, reasoning and appropriate appeals; and incorporated alternate positions into a sustained argument.